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Fran Tabor's avatar

A lesser writer would have had the cashier marry.

A much lesser writer would have had the man's singing evoke ancestral memories of troubadours traveling town to town, mesmerizing loved lorn damsels with his voice.

Instead Anna V. Jones holds true to her first description: someone beautiful as ordinary people are beautiful. We ordinaries don't sing heart-stoppingly-gloriously, but --- when no one is watching --- we do sing with honest emotion.

Returning the guitar was an act of love as powerful as the emotion that inspired the song. It told him someone wanted his song to continue. It stopped a suicide of the soul.

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Aaron Burch's avatar

Such a great, smart read of the story! Thanks so much for spending time with it, and this thoughtful reply!

The way you write about it here makes me think you might also really like Pete Witte's story!

https://ashortstorylong.substack.com/p/the-free-throw-shooter-by-peter-witte

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Anna Vangala Jones's avatar

thank you so much for reading & engaging so thoughtfully with the story & the characters!

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CM's avatar

So emotional and bittersweet! It reminds me of the conflicted feelings that come with the end of high school (or any chapter in one's life). I loved the banter between the friend group and it was so heartbreaking, yet emotionally satisfying, to see how they grew apart with time. Great read, and I hope to see more of your work in the future!

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Anna Vangala Jones's avatar

thank you so much!

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Mike McClelland's avatar

Anna is one of my favorite short story writers and I adore this story!!!

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Aaron Burch's avatar

Is this a first read for you? What a treat, if so!!

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Anna Vangala Jones's avatar

Mike! thank you so much. you’re the best & I love your SSL story. I also really enjoyed what you wrote today about how your favorite stories inspired yours!

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Mike Wilson's avatar

Just reread this on my lunch break. This one belongs in an anthology.

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Aaron Burch's avatar

Hell yeah, man. Isn't it so great?? I don't really have any power over this, but my goal is to get one of these stories anthologized. I'm obviously incredibly biased, but there's a handful of stories on here already that are among the best stories I've read in years.

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Anna Vangala Jones's avatar

thank you, Mike! & Aaron, I hope that happens for a SSL story

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Yvonne Eliot's avatar

Lovely and evocative

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Anna Vangala Jones's avatar

thank you!

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Mike Wilson's avatar

You know what I think? The Norton Anthology of Short Story, Long. That’s what I think. Like three years from now. I’m speaking it into existence. It is decided.

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Jason's avatar

This line here describes how we all felt at that age: "It was like we were nostalgic for those days while we were still living them—longing for what was right in front of us."

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